livemusic Posted October 14, 2017 Share Posted October 14, 2017 YOU CAN DISREGARD THIS FIRST RECORDING. This is a work tape, that's all. A 1-track recording done on iPad. This is quite an unusual lyric. I am needing to know if it has any merit. Not the recording, but the lyric, the story. Guitar is Taylor 8-string baritone tuned B to B with capo on fret 2, so, that means a G-chord is an E. Key of E. https://soundcloud.com/bill-pittman/the-muse-had-a-plan-work-tape. ******************************************************************************** EDIT: I decided to make this a boy loses girl song. I like the song, it will be a cool 50s-style dance song and this lyric idea fits better. Probably, lol. Here is a new 1-take recording, I have a football game to watch, this one will have to do for now, lol. This is in the same key but this is a J45 capo'd at 4th fret. CLICK BELOW. https://soundcloud.com/bill-pittman/the-muse-had-a-plan-gitvoc-work-tape Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Buc McMaster Posted October 14, 2017 Share Posted October 14, 2017 Well played, well sung...........but the lyric doesn't do much for me, even as a songwriter myself. There's not much here for the average, non-mucisian listener to grab hold of and relate to. And the melody feels very familiar....can't pin to anything specific but it seems like I've heard it before.......somewhere. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Lars68 Posted October 14, 2017 Share Posted October 14, 2017 I like the melody, performance, and easy going style. As for the lyrics, I think it depends on what you aim for. I do think that someone who is not a musician and who has not tried writing a song might have a hard time to relate. Maybe, you should play it to some non-musician friends too and get their opinion. Also, I think it depends on where you want to take the song. Do you aim for something light hearted, or something more serious in the "protest singer" style? Either way, I enjoyed your song. Lars Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
MorrisrownSal Posted October 14, 2017 Share Posted October 14, 2017 Enjoyed Bill... Great voice and the guitar sounds great. Hmmm Baritone.... [hits self...throws wallet in drawer, sits on hands] Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
livemusic Posted October 14, 2017 Author Share Posted October 14, 2017 I did the song over with a different lyric. I am liking this song and think a lost love lyric suits it better. First post amended. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
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