Lars68 Posted October 2, 2018 Share Posted October 2, 2018 I recently posted about a song I wrote while staying at a hotel, when away with work. I have now added some guitar parts and done a simple recording. Here is the finished song. Lyrics translated from Swedish below (very rough... but all the meaning is there): THE MOST BEAUTIFUL OF BLUE Verse 1 Close your eyes, the most beautiful of blue Put your head down on the pillow and drift off to dreamers' land I caress your hair, no monsters will come tonight Sleep peacefully and go chase the pirates' treasure Chorus 1 You you you are my blood You you are my everything You you you are my blood You you you you are my everything Verse 2 Five cold winters, and four springs now since you came In ten more trips around the sun will you then still want me to sing you this song? Have we drawn all the maps you'll need when that day comes and you'll go search your four-leaf-clover? Chorus 2 Verse 3 I hope you'll find someone to walk like sunshine beside you when the darkness falls It's already been written. Your dream leads you from me But follow it to the end of the line and let no bastards steal it from you. Chorus 3 Repeat verse 1 first half Lars Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
BoSoxBiker Posted October 3, 2018 Share Posted October 3, 2018 Very nicely done, Lars! The vocal presence is spot on and the guitar and vocals are very well performed. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
uncle fester Posted October 3, 2018 Share Posted October 3, 2018 Nice job Lars! A great composition, well played, vocals sounded good, balanced - nice. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Lars68 Posted October 3, 2018 Author Share Posted October 3, 2018 Thanks guys, I appreciate the listen. I hope the Swedish lyrics didn't sound all too strange to you. I know it is impossible for you to tell, given my poor translation, but these are by far my best set of lyrics. They are personal and mean a lot to me. I hope the kids can relate one day...maybe when they get kids of their own... Lars Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Lars68 Posted October 7, 2018 Author Share Posted October 7, 2018 I added some more instruments to my original version. I think it really helped create air and atmosphere in the song. The added guitar is a tiny, tiny 1938 Kalamazoo 3/4 Sport with Nashville tuned strings. I like it together with the standard guitar. The fake strings are played live on my iPad. Do you think it works? Lars Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
BoSoxBiker Posted October 8, 2018 Share Posted October 8, 2018 I like the strings. Nice amounts overall. I do wonder if they would be better staged. (eg - Introduced after 1st chorus, volume/presence increased and decreased as song goes on, ramping up to peak where you consider the peak to be. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
EuroAussie Posted October 8, 2018 Share Posted October 8, 2018 I added some more instruments to my original version. I think it really helped create air and atmosphere in the song. The added guitar is a tiny, tiny 1938 Kalamazoo 3/4 Sport with Nashville tuned strings. I like it together with the standard guitar. The fake strings are played live on my iPad. Do you think it works? Lars Youre getting so much better in many respects Lars. The pitch is way way better, voice deeper and more charcter, song construction getting stronger, but still a bit montonous. How could you give the song a bit more dynamics, variety to keep the listener hooked though the whole song ? Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Lars68 Posted October 8, 2018 Author Share Posted October 8, 2018 Youre getting so much better in many respects Lars. The pitch is way way better, voice deeper and more charcter, song construction getting stronger, but still a bit montonous. How could you give the song a bit more dynamics, variety to keep the listener hooked though the whole song ? Glad to hear things are moving ahead. I totally agree that there is a lack of dynamics. Of course it becomes even more so for non-Swedish speaking listeners, since there is no storyline or emotional content attached to the words themselves. I wish I could use my voice to add dynamics, but I'm not at that point yet. I'm just happy to be able to stay sort of on pitch for a full song. To be honest, a year ago I didn't think I had it in me. Instead now the dynamics need to get there through the song structure, guitar playing, arrangement and the mix. I'm kind of learning all of these things at once as I go along. I actually have plans to let a friend sing backup and play piano for this song. If I mix that well, it might give some of the dynamics needed. EA, you have been around the forum long enough to remember my early attempts at songwriting and singing. I was flat out horrible!! I can hear that now, when listening to those early recordings. So if I can listen back to songs like the one in this thread a few years from now, and find that I think it too sounds equally horrible, I'll be very happy, because it would mean that I'm probably at the point where I want to be I have to fight to do some things musically that others find completely natural, but I do enjoy every bit of it. On the positive side of things, relative to the effort it takes me to perform my songs, the songs themselves come to me without much effort. If I spend five hours writing a song, I probably spend fifty hours trying to sing it right Lars Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
EuroAussie Posted October 8, 2018 Share Posted October 8, 2018 You definitely improved on the vocal front for sure Lars, although i was thinking more of dynamics in terms of the guitar playing, strumming volume, strumming style variation, full strums vs part strums, bass / treble accenciation ... i guess the stuff you can do with your right hand. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Lars68 Posted October 17, 2018 Author Share Posted October 17, 2018 My musically talented neighbor, who helps with my music from time to time, added some vocals and organ to my song. Makes a world of difference. I mixed the song so the instruments come in one by one as the song progresses. Still learning this mixing thing, not so easy. How do you think it turned out? https://soundcloud.com/lars1968/de-vackraste-av-bla-1 Lars Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
EuroAussie Posted October 18, 2018 Share Posted October 18, 2018 My musically talented neighbor, who helps with my music from time to time, added some vocals and organ to my song. Makes a world of difference. I mixed the song so the instruments come in one by one as the song progresses. Still learning this mixing thing, not so easy. How do you think it turned out? https://soundcloud.com/lars1968/de-vackraste-av-bla-1 Lars The female vocals definitely help for sure Lars, created more colour, interest and the organ solo was a great touch - keeps the listener interested acoss the whole track. Well done ! Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Lars68 Posted October 18, 2018 Author Share Posted October 18, 2018 The female vocals definitely help for sure Lars, created more colour, interest and the organ solo was a great touch - keeps the listener interested acoss the whole track. Well done ! Thanks! Before recording, we also played and sang the song together, as she practiced. That was a real musical high for me. Playing one of my songs with someone else, and hearing them enjoy it. The whole really can be greater than the sum of the parts. Lars Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
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