Izzy Posted March 31, 2013 Share Posted March 31, 2013 This is one of 6 songs I have written and recorded in the past month. Feedback apreciated; if you heard my other songs let me know if I'm getting better and what I need to get better at, what wold help (besides getting pro assistance) tips and so on. My link Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
daveinspain Posted March 31, 2013 Share Posted March 31, 2013 That was excellent!! I haven't heard your other tunes Izzy but that is a great tune you got there.... Very catchy and danceable, hit material. If it was me though I would end it on the up beat part with a big bang instead of fizzling out... JMHO of course.... Good job, well done... [thumbup] Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
jdgm Posted March 31, 2013 Share Posted March 31, 2013 You need a band!! You need a band immediately! Given that I can't write songs or lyrics at all and my 'singing' sounds like a cow in labour....so you're a lot better than me and I wouldn't have the courage to put up one of my songs and ask for crits either....the only thing I thought was that there are a lot of lyrics and it sounds in 1 or 2 places like you're rushing to get it all in. I say leave out your age too. But the delivery's great, very personal and intense and you've got something to say and want people to hear it. That's what it's all about! Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
badbluesplayer Posted March 31, 2013 Share Posted March 31, 2013 That's great stuff, Izzy!! You have a great voice! Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Searcy Posted March 31, 2013 Share Posted March 31, 2013 Izzy, Great tune! Would you be OK with me trying to add a bass guitar line to this? Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
sellen Posted March 31, 2013 Share Posted March 31, 2013 Great tune Izzy!!! Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Valeriy Posted March 31, 2013 Share Posted March 31, 2013 Izzy, indeed, all OK, your fine individual style, as before, and this is the main thing. And some fluctuations as regards worse-better are always possible, if it will be necessary to make a guitar track maybe I can try too. I will not say anything about a band, it is almost always necessary, of course, but here may be some nuances. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
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Hall Posted March 31, 2013 Share Posted March 31, 2013 ^ Me Too! Steve Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
quapman Posted March 31, 2013 Share Posted March 31, 2013 I think it sounds great Izzy. Yes I think you have improved. Your timing has gotten way better. I have always loved your voice. You have a great tone there. Very nice. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Rabs Posted March 31, 2013 Share Posted March 31, 2013 Yup.. getting better each time I hear you.. Nice little tune there and no real comments but positive.. Great lyrics good melody... And you have a great voice.. Any refinement now will just come with more experience and learning different playing, recording and editing techniques (and theres no shortcut to that, just time and patience :)). Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
rocketman Posted March 31, 2013 Share Posted March 31, 2013 Sounds great! I agree that you will need to get with a band. Well actually a band should be looking for you!! Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Izzy Posted March 31, 2013 Author Share Posted March 31, 2013 Thank you all for your compliments and encouragement and especially for improvement advice. I would love a band, a little one. No one wants to play with me, though. If I search for a band on CL they all want girls in their early 20s or its an established giging band that does country (which I'd be cool with but I'd never play my own stuff). @Searcy Feel free to come up with a bass line if you like. Its all for fun here Again, thank ya'll. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
surfpup Posted March 31, 2013 Share Posted March 31, 2013 I like it. I particularly like how the "chorus" is soft and breathy in contrast to more intense verse vocal. Nice stuff. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
PingPongBob Posted March 31, 2013 Share Posted March 31, 2013 Outstanding!!! Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
charlie brown Posted April 1, 2013 Share Posted April 1, 2013 Izzy, Kudos...for the cojones, to even post your original work. I commend you on that! (I'm much too "shy," to do that!) CB Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Rabs Posted April 1, 2013 Share Posted April 1, 2013 Also too add.. I think you could do some really nice backing vocals to this tune.. Plus try doubling up the main vocal by either dupicating the track and moving it a few frames foward or by adding some reverb or a chorus to the vocal track.. This gives you a much thicker sound and helps to fill some space.. Its a classic studio tecnique to use. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Greybeard Posted April 1, 2013 Share Posted April 1, 2013 I like your voice too Izzy. I also like the originality of your song from the standpoint that it isn't just another bang-your-way-through song. It has great dynamics with your hard beat and the transitions into the soft parts. That shows a sophisticated imagination that I consider the mark of a more mature song writer and you seem to be way ahead of your years in that matter. I've worked with girls and more mature ladies in some of the bands I've played in over the years. From the opinions I've formed over the years in working with them, I think if you keep your good attitude and approach you will be quite successful working with others in the music business. Your voice is clear and strong and you have good control of it. That makes for a good fit in either a lead or backup harmony position on a wide variety of styles. Keep at it, hard work never hurts and there's a lot of learning that just happens naturally from a lot of practice. GB Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
duane v Posted April 1, 2013 Share Posted April 1, 2013 Thank you all for your compliments and encouragement and especially for improvement advice. I would love a band, a little one. No one wants to play with me, though. If I search for a band on CL they all want girls in their early 20s or its an established giging band that does country (which I'd be cool with but I'd never play my own stuff). @Searcy Feel free to come up with a bass line if you like. Its all for fun here Again, thank ya'll. Nice stuff Izz. We have a female singer that is in her 30's that just fell into our laps, so I belive you can find a project as well. My advice is find a guitar player that you can connect with and trust. Once that is accomplished the rest will snow ball. Last month I was playing bass in a Beatles tribute band.... Today I have a complete band where I play guitar that writes and has its own 24 hour lock-out studio.... And this was something that just came out of nowhere There is some serious talent in our room Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
kidblast Posted April 1, 2013 Share Posted April 1, 2013 Izzy,, excellent... love the vocal delivery and great lyrics! Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Guest Farnsbarns Posted April 1, 2013 Share Posted April 1, 2013 Wow, Izzy. This is really good, REALLY good! Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
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