Lars68 Posted June 15, 2019 Posted June 15, 2019 Here is my attempt at a love song, trying not to make it sound generic. I usually don't get very private here on the forum, but when I was younger I had lots of social anxiety and periods with stints of the blues. Hiding from the world was my solution. It was an easy escape but it never made things better. Meeting the mother of my children sixteen years ago changed my life. Had that not happened, who knows where I would be today... This is a song about finding love and finding oneself. https://soundcloud.com/lars1968/black-velvet-blanket Lars BLACK VELVET BLANKET a long black belvet blanket - was hanging over me a long black velvet blanket - as far as I could see It kept me from harm and tears but alone with my doubts and fears can you see me now, can you see me? (x3) a long black velvet blanket - my comfort and my curse a long black velvet blanket - never better, but forever worse with courage stabbed and pierced so far from your arms for years can you hear me now, can you hear me? (x3) my long black velvet blanket - you tore it asunder my long black velvet blanket - you brought me out from down under and your love is my saving grace my beacon for cloudless days and you see me now, and you hear me (x3)
Buc McMaster Posted June 16, 2019 Posted June 16, 2019 Well sir, I will say your singing is very good on this song..........you have learned well, grasshopper! Pretty much on pitch throughout, clear and warm........very well done, Lars!
Lars68 Posted June 16, 2019 Author Posted June 16, 2019 15 minutes ago, Buc McMaster said: Well sir, I will say your singing is very good on this song..........you have learned well, grasshopper! Pretty much on pitch throughout, clear and warm........very well done, Lars! Thanks, means a lot coming from your keyboard, Sir!! Still can’t sing in one single take. The recording is a mix of lots of takes. I fail a hundred times for each note I get right, but the good thing about recording is that once is enough. So my biggest improvement is not singing better; it’s finding that one time I get it right 😀 Lars
EuroAussie Posted June 16, 2019 Posted June 16, 2019 I agree with Buc, the singing is on pitch throughout, thats such a big step forward. Now that you got pitch sorted, try working a bit more on dynamics (guitar or vocals) and variety. Its a tad flat and repetitive in its current form.
Lars68 Posted June 16, 2019 Author Posted June 16, 2019 6 hours ago, EuroAussie said: I agree with Buc, the singing is on pitch throughout, thats such a big step forward. Now that you got pitch sorted, try working a bit more on dynamics (guitar or vocals) and variety. Its a tad flat and repetitive in its current form. I appreciate the confirmation about pitch. It's been a loooooong time coming for me. It is a skill I definitely wasn't born with. I've had to work several years to finally be able to put a simple tune like this one together. However, this is such a vital thing for me, since it means if I just work hard enough I can continue to write, play, sing and record simple tunes of my own. That has been my primary goal since I started writing five years ago. EA, I totally agree about the lack of dynamics. I think it's a result of two things. First I don't have much control or freedom within my voice. All efforts are put towards finding the pitch. It's not an instrument at my command. Second, doing multi tracking is harder on dynamics than singing and playing at once. Especially when laying down the starting guitar track, with no vocal timing or intensity to guide it. Thanks for listening! Lars
BoSoxBiker Posted June 17, 2019 Posted June 17, 2019 Very well done! I agree with everyone. Great improvements with your vocals seem to happen often. Nothing wrong with comp'ing a take together. Some of us (me) comp vocal tracks together and they still stink. LOL
EuroAussie Posted June 17, 2019 Posted June 17, 2019 16 hours ago, Lars68 said: You can easily add dynamics with just the strumming Lars. Sometimes soft, sometimes with a big more attack, other times brushing the high strings a bit more to give it sparkle and so on. If you need to focus on vocal delivery, and keep that consistent then play around with guitar dynamics. EA, I totally agree about the lack of dynamics. I think it's a result of two things. First I don't have much control or freedom within my voice. All efforts are put towards finding the pitch. It's not an instrument at my command. Second, doing multi tracking is harder on dynamics than singing and playing at once. Especially when laying down the starting guitar track, with no vocal timing or intensity to guide it. Thanks for listening! Lars
Lars68 Posted June 17, 2019 Author Posted June 17, 2019 4 hours ago, EuroAussie said: EA, I understand, and it's a point I need to work on. I was just saying that I find it difficult to play the guitar with dynamics when tracking the recording without singing. I only sing in my head, to give me a sense of timing and rythm for the guitar. It's easier playing the guitar with "emotion" when I sing at the same time. Lars
Lars68 Posted June 20, 2019 Author Posted June 20, 2019 I added some strings played on my iPad to the second and third verses. I think it added some needed atmosphere to the song and also helped with changing the dynamics a bit. Here it is: https://soundcloud.com/lars1968/black-velvet-blanket Lars
kwalker201 Posted June 20, 2019 Posted June 20, 2019 Lars, I enjoyed that and will also say that you have improved greatly on your vocals.
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