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Song Building Part 2


Buc McMaster
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I must say developing the lyrics for this has been tortuous to this point. I try very hard to find the right words to convey an idea, remaining minimalistic, and for this writing at least, find an unconventional rhyme scheme. This one is pretty odd, rhyming the first, third and fourth lines in two places within the line and giving the second line a repetitive word that will appear in each verse. I have but the two verses for now......there will be two more following the refrain, which I have not spent any time on yet. I think it's self explanatory, but it's an attempt to inhabit an young man's reactions to a pretty girl he encounters. No video, just a short audio track.

 

http://www.youtube.com/watch?v=u0-wrZcnLTI

 

Venus Resurrected Buc/May 2018

 

Turn around and take a step in my direction

where you goin’ anyway

a queen uncrowned or the Venus resurrected

run aground on the unexpected

hypnotized or am i just intoxicated

it don’t matter anyway

no disguise i feel so unsophisticated

this could get so complicated

 

 

 

Bear with me........this one is proving difficult.

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Those of you who do songwriting venture into an area way over my head. It’s nice to just listen to music, but learning the minutia of what makes a guitar sound as it does, and to dissect and play a favorite song, is one of the best ways to do music appreciation. Seeing you pull the curtain back, revealing the process just makes songwriting all the more daunting to me, and I suppose those who do break songs down to their melodic and lyrical nuts and bolts and can appreciate the craft more than I. Kind of makes my wanting to go right to the music seem like skipping the main course and going right to dessert. I have to really need to get it out, to communicate how I feel, for me to want to say something through a song.

 

So, you’ve moved it up a half step? The second (atonal?) chord shape gets the listener to want to hear what’s next. Looking forward to seeing where the song goes for the refrain.

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