Lars68 Posted May 1, 2022 Share Posted May 1, 2022 (edited) Here is a new song I wrote about two weeks ago. I made a recording at the time, but I wasn't happy with it. Since then I have been fighting a terrible cold that kept me in bed for days. I now feel better again and want to get the song right. I tried a couple of takes and this is this best one I could do. My voice is kind of nasal and still suffering from the cold, and I had to change the key compared to my original attempts. It's a simple song about enjoying the simple things in life. As usual with my songs, I will try to improve on it by eventually doing a multitrack recording with hopefully better vocals and some other instruments added. How do you think this works, as a sort of “demo”? Lars NOTES ON THE FRIDGE The migrant birds are heading South as the first leaves are falling On my back porch I'll be waiting winter long Once I reached for endless skies Now all I want is a cup of coffee and a favorite Bob Dylan song No mountains to climb searching for richess Only “Masters of War” as I do yesterday's dishes There's a long and winding road over the hills and past the horizon It brought you home to me Bring the blanket, put your arm around me A quiet life with the biggest bang and there is no place I'd rather be There's no buried treasure beyond the ridge Only “Blowing in the Wind” as I read the notes on the fridge Edited May 1, 2022 by Lars68 Quote Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
62burst Posted May 1, 2022 Share Posted May 1, 2022 Decent imagery there, Lars. If you did add some other instrumentation, in the way that strings like violin, cello, synth, etc can do, it would "hold up" the sound for you, and maybe allow you to back off of the reverb on the vocals a bit. But you are getting your voice dialed in a bit more, even if you're just coming off of a bad cold. Quote Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Lars68 Posted May 2, 2022 Author Share Posted May 2, 2022 11 hours ago, 62burst said: Decent imagery there, Lars. If you did add some other instrumentation, in the way that strings like violin, cello, synth, etc can do, it would "hold up" the sound for you, and maybe allow you to back off of the reverb on the vocals a bit. But you are getting your voice dialed in a bit more, even if you're just coming off of a bad cold. Thanks! Yes, vocals are becoming more natural, but I’m not fully satisfied with this take. There are still weak vocal spots, but it will have to do for now. Overall I’m very happy that inspiration and songs keep on coming. Working on songs is by far my favorite part of the hobby, and I never tire of trying to improve. Lars Quote Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
kwalker201 Posted May 4, 2022 Share Posted May 4, 2022 I liked the wording that you have there. Really nice tune! Quote Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Lars68 Posted May 5, 2022 Author Share Posted May 5, 2022 19 hours ago, kwalker201 said: I liked the wording that you have there. Really nice tune! Thanks a lot! I kind of like the tune myself. The lyrics mean a lot to me, but the performance is not great. I'm working on that along with the addition of a few new chords. We'll see what happens… Lars Quote Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
MissouriPicker Posted May 8, 2022 Share Posted May 8, 2022 (edited) Pretty sweet song, Lars! I looked for things I’d do differently, but this song is “your” personal look at life and I don’t see much I’d want to do different if I were writing it. You draw a really nice picture of things you and I (and many others) value. Your writing and performing are truly better than ever before and you are using your voice. Just keep doing what you’re doing.. I think we write from the same place inside of ourselves. You’re a folksinger. Enjoy it, my friend. Edited May 8, 2022 by MissouriPicker Quote Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Lars68 Posted May 8, 2022 Author Share Posted May 8, 2022 4 hours ago, MissouriPicker said: Pretty sweet song, Lars! I looked for things I’d do differently, but this song is “your” personal look at life and I don’t see much I’d want to do different if I were writing it. You draw a really nice picture of things you and I (and many others) value. Your writing and performing are truly better than ever before and you are using your voice. Just keep doing what you’re doing.. I think we write from the same place inside of ourselves. You’re a folksinger. Enjoy it, my friend. Thanks a lot, MP!! Lars Quote Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Lars68 Posted May 8, 2022 Author Share Posted May 8, 2022 (edited) I did a new multitrack version of the song, changing a bunch of things. I switched from using a Martin to a Gibson! I changed the key, added new chords to create some space. I added a little riff, an organ, and some percussion. Sounds much closer to my intention now. Lars Edit: just used a new toy that came in the mail. I added electric guitar with an E-bow to the choruses. Edited May 9, 2022 by Lars68 Quote Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
62burst Posted May 8, 2022 Share Posted May 8, 2022 Yes. Fills things out nicely. Well done. 👍. Quote Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
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