dhanners623 Posted October 18, 2017 Share Posted October 18, 2017 Whipped out the J-35 and wrote this yesterday. I'm sure there'll be some editing along the way. It's called "Refugee." http://m.youtube.com/watch?t=2s&v=OhDKAmLEKuQ Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Lars68 Posted October 18, 2017 Share Posted October 18, 2017 I like it! Can you easily post the lyrics? Lars Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
dhanners623 Posted October 18, 2017 Author Share Posted October 18, 2017 I like it! Can you easily post the lyrics? Lars Sure thing.... Refugee © 2017 by David Hanners Home is rubble and debris Nightmares when I sleep Demagogues argue right and wrong Can’t reason with a barrel bomb Give me your masses who yearn to breathe free Give me your refugee First casualty of war is truth Boy on the beach knew that’s not true Photo worth a thousand words What’s a Syrian child worth? Give me your masses who yearn to breathe free Give me your refugee Harbor, foreign coast Woman with a torch, flames of gold Beacon for the world to see Welcomed the refugee Times have hardened hearts of men So we wait again Our skin is wrong, we are poor Woman in the harbor shut the door Give me your masses who yearn to breathe free Give me your refugee Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
blindboygrunt Posted October 18, 2017 Share Posted October 18, 2017 I have to say that I reckon you’ve got the perfect guitar for your style of both playing and writing Remove the word ‘syrian’ and the song would take on a much wider context I’m not disagreeing with your point of view on Syria or saying I agree Let’s not starts that But from a purely songwriting point of view that word cements what your point Is and great songs are a little more vague , let the listener place it in their own context Apart from that , great job sir 👍 Edit : or keep it in there , it’s your song man ! Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Lars68 Posted October 18, 2017 Share Posted October 18, 2017 Thanks for the lyrics. I really like the words. It is a great set of lyrics. However, I agree with BBG about removing the word Syrian. I think the bit about the photo and the boy on the beach should be an obvious enough reference, placing the song in time, for those who listen carefully. For those missing the reference, it keeps the song more general, a win-win... Great stuff, as far as my taste! Thanks for posting. Lars Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
dhanners623 Posted October 18, 2017 Author Share Posted October 18, 2017 I have to say that I reckon you’ve got the perfect guitar for your style of both playing and writing Remove the word ‘syrian’ and the song would take on a much wider context I’m not disagreeing with your point of view on Syria or saying I agree Let’s not starts that But from a purely songwriting point of view that word cements what your point Is and great songs are a little more vague , let the listener place it in their own context Apart from that , great job sir Edit : or keep it in there , it’s your song man ! Thanks for the comments. I wrestled with the word "Syrian." Your point is correct in that if I leave it out, it gives the song a wider reach. I wound up sticking it in there because it does seem there is a disparity in how the world values a child's life, even in the Arab world, where I currently live and perform. I may revisit the decision. I originally had the chorus saying, "Give me your huddled masses yearning to breathe free...." but found the additional words made it hard to sing; just too many syllables. However, as I refine my phrasing and get more comfortable with it, I find I can stick those words back in to more accurately reflect the Emma Lazarus poem. Again, thanks for the feedback. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
dhanners623 Posted October 18, 2017 Author Share Posted October 18, 2017 Actually, I went and read the Lazarus poem again (it's been awhile) and decided to lift some phrases from it, so I have rewritten the third verse: Sunset gates of a foreign shore A mighty woman with a torch Beacon for the world to see Welcomed the refugee Wretched refuse come again But time has hardened hearts of men Our skin is wrong, we are poor Mother of Exiles shut the door Give me your huddled masses yearning to breathe free Give me your refugee Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
frenchie1281734003 Posted October 19, 2017 Share Posted October 19, 2017 I like it a lot. Very good song. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
father_of_pearl Posted October 19, 2017 Share Posted October 19, 2017 I love your percussive strumming Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Jalex Posted October 19, 2017 Share Posted October 19, 2017 Really liked that. Cool groove, lyrics and singing. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
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