Lars68 Posted June 18, 2017 Share Posted June 18, 2017 I'm not attempting any new songs at the moment, instead I'm focus on learning to do the ones I have better. This is far from perfect, but I actually like where this one is going. https://soundcloud.com/lars1968/29th-of-september-new The repetetive strumming and monotone voice kind of suit this song, so I did not try to change that. It is not to the most upbeat of subject matters, so please keep all knives away from exposed wrists Lars Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
theflyingturtle Posted June 18, 2017 Share Posted June 18, 2017 It is coming along! As many of us have stated before, your pitch has improved dramatically. Your first attempts were littered with sour notes, now being off pitch is more the exception rather than the rule. I do think the key the song is written in is too low for your voice. I've gone through the process of learning a song but then found out I couldn't sing in the same key as the artist. Now I begin learning a song by learning the first verse and the chorus. Then once I have the melody memorized I play with different keys until I find the key that works for me the best, then I write out the song in that key. I do think it is time for another lesson. I feel that learning the significance of how chords are built will help you improve in some key areas. I'll pm you. I wish I had the tech knowledge to make some clips so that I could model what it is I am trying to convey. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Lars68 Posted June 18, 2017 Author Share Posted June 18, 2017 Thanks Turtle, and I do appreciate some more tips! Yes, I'm very happy with my progress, six months ago I didn't think I would ever reach the point I'm currently at. If all I wanted to do was to record songs, I could get away with my current level. I could piece together a decent song from a couple of different takes. Also, I hear my mistakes when they happen, so I'm just not consistent yet to get through three to four minutes without messing up a few times, but that is ok for now. I hope I haven't caused anyone to fall into a depression from listening. If you are borderline, stay away! Lars Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
kelly campbell Posted June 19, 2017 Share Posted June 19, 2017 Sounds good Lars, it is really coming around good for you. Keep at it and thanks for sharing your progress. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Jalex Posted June 19, 2017 Share Posted June 19, 2017 Sounded pretty good to me. Keep it up👍 Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
EuroAussie Posted June 19, 2017 Share Posted June 19, 2017 Lars, that is a massive step change forward! First song that I have heard from you that is fully in tune. This is a great achievement and makes all the hard work pay off. Give yourself a big pat on the back. Except I wish the topic wasn't so grim, right on my birthday! Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
'Scales Posted June 19, 2017 Share Posted June 19, 2017 Unusual sort of song, but a pretty decent effort with good consistency on the vocal and guitar I thought. Stick at it mate! Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
blindboygrunt Posted June 20, 2017 Share Posted June 20, 2017 Lars, that is a massive step change forward! First song that I have heard from you that is fully in tune. This is a great achievement and makes all the hard work pay off. Give yourself a big pat on the back. Except I wish the topic wasn't so grim, right on my birthday! You and me have the same birthday Aussie Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Lars68 Posted June 20, 2017 Author Share Posted June 20, 2017 Thanks for listening and the support friends, and happy bithday EA! The song is indeed a little weird, but that is how I like it. It's memories and images from the time when my mother passed away in cancer. I wanted the song to be sort of eerie and dark, giving an uneasy feeling, because that is how I remember this time. Don't know how successful that was, though, but that is what I was aiming for... Lars Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
EuroAussie Posted June 21, 2017 Share Posted June 21, 2017 You and me have the same birthday Aussie But mines on Sept 29th Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
blindboygrunt Posted June 21, 2017 Share Posted June 21, 2017 But mines on Sept 29th Oh right The date is in the song ! Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Lars68 Posted June 21, 2017 Author Share Posted June 21, 2017 Oh right The date is in the song ! That is the day my mother passed away fourteen years ago. Always a though day for me. She was only 59. Lars Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Lars68 Posted June 24, 2017 Author Share Posted June 24, 2017 Turtle, here is the song again with the key change you suggested. This time with capo up one fret (to third). It made a world of difference! Thanks so much!!! https://soundcloud.com/lars1968/29th-of-september-new-2 Lars Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Murph Posted June 24, 2017 Share Posted June 24, 2017 Nice, Lars. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Lars68 Posted June 25, 2017 Author Share Posted June 25, 2017 Nice, Lars. Thanks Murph! I'm enjoying this so much. What a great hobby this is !! I don't have a lot of tools in my tool box yet, but I love experimenting with what I've got. For the latest attempt above I played with the flesh of my thumb, instead of a pick as in the first version. It made the vocals stand out much more, and gave the song much greater intimacy. Changing the key, as Turtle suggested, also really helped my singing. I'm hoping to really learn more skills and tricks in the coming years to be able to find the moods and emotions I'm looking for more easily. Lars Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
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