Lars68 Posted May 18, 2021 Share Posted May 18, 2021 (edited) I wrote and recorded the song below over the weekend. It's sort of a “live now, before it's too late” kind of song. It might be fitting, now that we hopefully are nearing the end of the pandemic and we can start experiencing things outside of the four walls of our homes again. It's only a one-take, practice recording, done right after finishing the lyrics. So all is done in one go infront of the mic, which is not exactly my strongest suit, but at least it's honest. Whenever I do a proper recording, I hope to add some more space to the lyrics, some kind of riff/bridge/or other way to make the guitar more interesting. I've already made some changes to the lyrics, as noted below, a few more tweaks are in the works. Any and all suggestions for improvements are welcome! THESE FOUR WALLS Verse 1: If your todays are like tomorrows, and just like yesterdays, come meet me at the railroad station New memories lie awaiting ways away Chorus 1: These four walls that surround me, I will fight them 'till the end These four walls that surround me, they will never be my friend Verse 2 On a long train of longing, let the rails sing us to sleep Passing towns, fields, and valleys, with rivers wide and so deep Chorus 2: No more walls to surround me, I will fight them 'till the end No more walls to surround me, come ride with me my friend Verse 3: Time's tide will wear us all, and our tracks run to an end but come tomorrow, we'll wake as new to meet the mysteries lying round the bend Chorus 3: One day walls may surround us, when our shift comes to an end (last bit will be changed to: ”as down old age we descend”) One day walls may surround us, please stay with me my friend Edited May 18, 2021 by Lars68 Quote Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
kelly campbell Posted May 19, 2021 Share Posted May 19, 2021 On 5/18/2021 at 10:44 AM, Lars68 said: I wrote and recorded the song below over the weekend. It's sort of a “live now, before it's too late” kind of song. It might be fitting, now that we hopefully are nearing the end of the pandemic and we can start experiencing things outside of the four walls of our homes again. It's only a one-take, practice recording, done right after finishing the lyrics. So all is done in one go infront of the mic, which is not exactly my strongest suit, but at least it's honest. Whenever I do a proper recording, I hope to add some more space to the lyrics, some kind of riff/bridge/or other way to make the guitar more interesting. I've already made some changes to the lyrics, as noted below, a few more tweaks are in the works. Any and all suggestions for improvements are welcome! THESE FOUR WALLS Verse 1: If your todays are like tomorrows, and just like yesterdays, come meet me at the railroad station New memories lie awaiting ways away Chorus 1: These four walls that surround me, I will fight them 'till the end These four walls that surround me, they will never be my friend Verse 2 On a long train of longing, let the rails sing us to sleep Passing towns, fields, and valleys, with rivers wide and so deep Chorus 2: No more walls to surround me, I will fight them 'till the end No more walls to surround me, come ride with me my friend Verse 3: Time's tide will wear us all, and our tracks run to an end but come tomorrow, we'll wake as new to meet the mysteries lying round the bend Chorus 3: One day walls may surround us, when our shift comes to an end (last bit will be changed to: ”as down old age we descend”) One day walls may surround us, please stay with me my friend Nice job there Lars! I think we all can relate ! thanks again. Quote Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
QuestionMark Posted May 19, 2021 Share Posted May 19, 2021 Lars-I always enjoy your creativity, lyrical prowess, and guitar pickin’! QM aka “Jazzman” Jeff Quote Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
BoSoxBiker Posted May 20, 2021 Share Posted May 20, 2021 Nice, Lars! I'm looking forward to hearing how this one progresses. Quote Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Lars68 Posted May 20, 2021 Author Share Posted May 20, 2021 (edited) Guys, I appreciate it! I know this track is far from perfect, but compared to the standard of my past one-take efforts, I feel I'm making slow progress. I already have some lyrical revisions ready. There were some redundant words, and a repetition of imagery (sort of...) that I have revised for an upcoming multi-track attempt. Also, the melody came to me so fast that I almost wonder if I unknowingly stole it. Has that ever happened to you? If my melody is a rip off, please let me know before I have a law suit on my hands 😀 Isure hope it's not a Metallica song... 😳 Lars Edited May 21, 2021 by Lars68 Quote Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
kwalker201 Posted May 20, 2021 Share Posted May 20, 2021 Very nice Lars! You're making tremendous progress and waiting for the revised tune. 👍 Quote Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
DanvillRob Posted May 20, 2021 Share Posted May 20, 2021 I wrote a song last June about the lock-down. The music is Bob Dylan's "I Shall Be Released" Quote Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Lars68 Posted May 21, 2021 Author Share Posted May 21, 2021 16 hours ago, kwalker201 said: Very nice Lars! You're making tremendous progress and waiting for the revised tune. 👍 Thanks a bunch! I believe the forum needs you to post a song again. I miss them! Lars Quote Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Lars68 Posted May 21, 2021 Author Share Posted May 21, 2021 (edited) 15 hours ago, DanvillRob said: I wrote a song last June about the lock-down. The music is Bob Dylan's "I Shall Be Released" Beutiful! Lovely guitar too. I have a 12-string as well (a cheapo Gretsch) but I sure can’t make it sound like that. Lars Edited May 21, 2021 by Lars68 Quote Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
MorrisrownSal Posted May 21, 2021 Share Posted May 21, 2021 Lars - very nice! Singing great too.... let's all get back to making music. I think I will be drinking some wine and picking with a few buddies tonight. I am real eager! Quote Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
DanvillRob Posted May 22, 2021 Share Posted May 22, 2021 12 hours ago, Salfromchatham said: Lars - very nice! Singing great too.... let's all get back to making music. I think I will be drinking some wine and picking with a few buddies tonight. I am real eager! I really miss being able to play with others.... hopefully we'll get back to that soon! Quote Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
DanvillRob Posted May 22, 2021 Share Posted May 22, 2021 On 5/18/2021 at 7:44 AM, Lars68 said: I wrote and recorded the song below over the weekend. It's sort of a “live now, before it's too late” kind of song. It might be fitting, now that we hopefully are nearing the end of the pandemic and we can start experiencing things outside of the four walls of our homes again. It's only a one-take, practice recording, done right after finishing the lyrics. So all is done in one go infront of the mic, which is not exactly my strongest suit, but at least it's honest. Whenever I do a proper recording, I hope to add some more space to the lyrics, some kind of riff/bridge/or other way to make the guitar more interesting. I've already made some changes to the lyrics, as noted below, a few more tweaks are in the works. Any and all suggestions for improvements are welcome! THESE FOUR WALLS Verse 1: If your todays are like tomorrows, and just like yesterdays, come meet me at the railroad station New memories lie awaiting ways away Chorus 1: These four walls that surround me, I will fight them 'till the end These four walls that surround me, they will never be my friend Verse 2 On a long train of longing, let the rails sing us to sleep Passing towns, fields, and valleys, with rivers wide and so deep Chorus 2: No more walls to surround me, I will fight them 'till the end No more walls to surround me, come ride with me my friend Verse 3: Time's tide will wear us all, and our tracks run to an end but come tomorrow, we'll wake as new to meet the mysteries lying round the bend Chorus 3: One day walls may surround us, when our shift comes to an end (last bit will be changed to: ”as down old age we descend”) One day walls may surround us, please stay with me my friend Great job! Quote Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Lars68 Posted May 30, 2021 Author Share Posted May 30, 2021 Here is a stab at a multi track recording of my new song with two guitars, keys, and some percussion. I think it turned out okey. Some parts were better in the original, while others are much better in the new version. So I decided to keep them both. Lars Quote Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
kwalker201 Posted May 31, 2021 Share Posted May 31, 2021 Well done Lars. I think the added fills added a nice touch. Quote Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
BoSoxBiker Posted May 31, 2021 Share Posted May 31, 2021 15 hours ago, Lars68 said: Here is a stab at a multi track recording of my new song with two guitars, keys, and some percussion. I think it turned out okey. Some parts were better in the original, while others are much better in the new version. So I decided to keep them both. Lars Pretty Cool, Lars. What was the element on the right? It sounded like a cross between electric piano and a Glock'. I like all of the added elements. Well done. Quote Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Lars68 Posted June 1, 2021 Author Share Posted June 1, 2021 21 hours ago, BoSoxBiker said: Pretty Cool, Lars. What was the element on the right? It sounded like a cross between electric piano and a Glock'. I like all of the added elements. Well done. The part on the right is keys I played on the iPad in GarageBand. It’s called Warm Bells, which is pretty much what it sounds like. I like it! Lars Quote Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
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