Lars - this is pretty good. Nice guitar and voice. What guitar did you use? Recording is very nice, I am still baffled at how folks do this, I am so technically challenged I can't begin to progress out of the rudimentary stage of a sloppy I-Phone recording that serves little purpose but to remind me of the melody and lyrics I write.
I like the message here in this song - It speaks to me of the deep scar we are experiencing world wide. I cannot help but want to take a red pencil to your lyrics - when I listen to this over and over I cannot escape the feeling that the lyrical timing stumbles a bit interrupting the melodic tempo. I am addicted to simplicity. If you would permit me, I'd like to send you my initial suggestions targeted at syllables. I think there are some easy approaches to reduce some of the lyrical difficulties and smooth out this song without changing the message at all.
Please keep writing, your stuff is getting better and better. I would love be sitting on a couch sipping bourbon and listening to your concert catologing your original songs, this is great - its exactly, to me, the stuff that Gibson guitars were built for.