Lars68 Posted March 14, 2021 Share Posted March 14, 2021 (edited) I've been working hard recently to improve a song I wrote a while back. I wonder if you could be so kind and have a listen and give some constructive feedback regarding possible weak points, or what might already work well enough? The song is recorded on my old 1942 J-45, which is perhaps my most treasured material possession. A truly wonderful guitar, and one I hope to be worthy of one day... Lars Edited March 14, 2021 by Lars68 2 Quote Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
jt Posted March 19, 2021 Share Posted March 19, 2021 Lars, Wonderful! You definitely are worthy of that guitar. 1 Quote Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Lars68 Posted March 19, 2021 Author Share Posted March 19, 2021 Thanks for listening John. I’m working on the ”worthyness”...one note at a time... Lars 1 Quote Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Twang Gang Posted March 19, 2021 Share Posted March 19, 2021 The guitar is recorded very well and sounds great by the way. But the vocals I think need to be a little more up front. I know my 70 year old ears don't work like they used to, but I just couldn't quite make out all the lyrics. "May each passing mile help my ........something, something, something." So overall I would just try to clean up the mix a little. Quote Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Lars68 Posted March 20, 2021 Author Share Posted March 20, 2021 16 hours ago, Twang Gang said: The guitar is recorded very well and sounds great by the way. But the vocals I think need to be a little more up front. I know my 70 year old ears don't work like they used to, but I just couldn't quite make out all the lyrics. "May each passing mile help my ........something, something, something." So overall I would just try to clean up the mix a little. Thanks for your feedback! The lyrics are ”may each passing mile help my soul awake.” I'm very insecure about my singing as far as tone and pitch, so I have tendency to keep it down in mixes. I'll keep that in mind going forward. Lars Quote Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
fortyearspickn Posted March 20, 2021 Share Posted March 20, 2021 5 hours ago, Lars68 said: Thanks for your feedback! The lyrics are ”may each passing mile help my soul awake.” I'm very insecure about my singing as far as tone and pitch, so I have tendency to keep it down in mixes. I'll keep that in mind going forward. Lars I do that too. I find everyone appreciates it ! Good Job ! Carry On ! Quote Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Al Pike Posted March 21, 2021 Share Posted March 21, 2021 Wow. Beautiful. Quote Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Lars68 Posted March 21, 2021 Author Share Posted March 21, 2021 5 hours ago, Al Pike said: Wow. Beautiful. Thanks !! Lars Quote Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
kelly campbell Posted March 23, 2021 Share Posted March 23, 2021 Nice work...Thanks for posting it. Quote Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
'Scales Posted March 25, 2021 Share Posted March 25, 2021 Very nice Lars. Your singing has improved immensely and I am always happy when I manage to write a sub-3-minute song that sounds complete so I appreciated that aspect too. Quote Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
kwalker201 Posted March 25, 2021 Share Posted March 25, 2021 6 hours ago, 'Scales said: Your singing has improved immensely 👍 Quote Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Violeiro Posted March 25, 2021 Share Posted March 25, 2021 Nice work, really appreciate listening to your work! Quote Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Lars68 Posted March 25, 2021 Author Share Posted March 25, 2021 Thanks for listening and the nice comments everyone. Lars Quote Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
dhanners623 Posted March 26, 2021 Share Posted March 26, 2021 VERY nice job! It is a thoughtful song and a really nice melody. As others have noted ,I'd bring the vocals up, and as I've mentioned on your stuff before, sing with confidence. You do a fine job. If anything, I'd edit out a few words here and there to give your voice some breathing room (literally and figuratively) but that's just one guy's opinion. Keep at it. You have a lot to offer, and we enjoy it. Quote Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
EuroAussie Posted March 26, 2021 Share Posted March 26, 2021 Back on top of Lars, big progress here. Both in the songwriting and the vocals. Keep going forward ! Quote Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Lars68 Posted March 26, 2021 Author Share Posted March 26, 2021 Well, it has been and still is a bumpy ride in this hobby, David and EA, I appreciate the continuing support. Lars Quote Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
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